[George16]

Where were you guys when I needed help with my papers 20-something years ago?

You are very lucky to have a great community in helping you improve your paper. If I had this much help back then, I could have finished my engineering degree in 4 years instead of almost 6 (too much partying). Heck, I had to type my papers using a typewriter because I didn't have a computer.

I agree with everyone with regards to being direct to the point. As an engineer, the shortest distance between two points is always a straight line no matter what. Try to use this concept in everything that you do. Short, concise, and direct to the point gets you the dough.

Good luck.