Building a Better Wheelchair

I like the new name. "Wheels for the World" its catchy.

I think the background of the page is a little to busy, kind of distracting to the eye.

Some of the text changes are good. Some still need to be addressed, but no big deal.

I like the changing of 3rd world to developing countries, sounds nicer.

Any thoughts on the "end-user", I thought it sounded cold, or distant maybe, which is not good for a humanitarian effort. I think something like user, occupant, or something else along those lines will be OK.

[jayjay283]

is end user still in there ? tried to get it out, sounded too I dunno computer guy ...

1. think the background is a bit much, Its tame for what we usually do but I hear ya, the fliping and spinning may be a tad high. point taken

2.Help me address the text, as I said V1, I saw it said off tires not off road, in there, its all easily fixed and I need help

no prob, most of the stuff I tried to address in the changes that I sent you earlier. I may have missed the off tires thing. thats funny.

i'll get v2 to you tomorrow some time, as I got to leave for work at 0500.

[JERRY2KONE]

JAYJAY you are the man. That looks awesome. I like the very modern technology useage. Personally I like the whole busy theme. It is a little destracting at first, but that would make me want to look at it over and over again trying to take it all in. I love it. Nice job.

[JThiessen]

Here is the "about us" edit I did. Shaun, you need to add some stuff about you and your family to it. I recommended you move the info about why people need a chair to your intro page - but its still in the document. Jay - maybe you can upload it??

[jayjay283]

ill upload it all bro work in progress, I appreciate any help. Not doing it for me or money, just to make people happy I hope, Its Shauns Idea im just kicking in, Any input will help, be it mean or not

[TDC57]

Originally Posted by FireWire79

I wish I had gotten the color codes before I spent about two hours editing and proof reading. If you could TDC57, get me an e-mail address via PM so that I can send you some of the changes that I made as attachments.

Most of the stuff I just changed, but you should be able to notice the difference. Most of the big changes are in red so you cant miss them. I did do a little re-wording in order to make it easier to read.

I look forward to getting your PM. And by they way, I did make some changes to the "Welcome" page. You had some really great facts about poverty and handicapped people that needed to be right up front to grab people's attention so that they read the rest of the page.

Bitchen!! Thanks sir.. I'll pm you now.. I'm looking forward to the help!

Thank you so much!.. Right on!..

Have a great one Sir and really I THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart.. awesome I’m really looking forward to reading your comments.. Thanks again..


Shaun..

Originally Posted by lincpimp

Hey Shaun, the chairs look great. I can only see one thing you may need to include: brakes... Most chairs have some sort of brake, mainly to stop people like Harold "accidentally" falling asleep and running over pets, small children, bums, etc...

Hey thanks James.. hahahhaaaa I like the visual you provide!.. hahahaaaa.. I’m working on the brakes. I just don’t have anything completed to show off at this time.. thanks for the comments and the kind words sir.. have a great one

Shaun.

Originally Posted by jayjay283

ok Man heres version 1 dont get pissed if you hate it anyhting can be changed, we know where to go from here by you all calling me a something or other,..Also my wife changed the name, its just temporary, she thought 3rd world was derogatory being Rican and all LOL ANYTHING can be changed in 10 seconds, ok a hour, Version 1 version 2 3 4 5 6 7 anytime. Let me know fonts formats pics etc easily changed now that the main code is down


http://www.wheelchairdesigns.com/

Woooo hoooo I’ll check it out now, I’m looking forward to seeing it!.. thanks Sir..

Shaun.

[TDC57]

WOW… That's so much better!.. Jay your wife did a great job!..

Can we please look at making the following adjustments (?)

Front flash / Intro!.. Fricken awesome!.. she is a flash master!...
First and foremost (wheels for the world) is great I wish I would have thought of it! but sadly it’s already been taken by another company…So we’ll need to change the name back to wheelchairdesigns (sorry).. buddy but I don’t want to get sued

During the flash intro before the main screen comes up can we slow it down, it way to fast (but cool / great idea) then if possible can we add a wheelchair design to it. The existing circle would be great for the wheels that way we just need to add the rest (see pathetic picture below / I'll email you) maybe even adding the name into the design lines if that makes sense ?? (wheel) down / back line, (chair) butt line (designs) leg lines.. again I would love to use Wheels for the world but it’s someone else’s domain.. sorry!..

During the later part of the flash the screen turns grey (solid gray) then it fades into the main webpage. Can we get rid of the gray page ??

Main screen page: looks great and defiantly on the rite patch, here are my suggestions:

Top of the page:
The globe needs to be frozen once it's up, the continues movements distracts the eyes (make the page look to busy).. can also get the left side of the world rounded off like the right side is (nice an smooth). Then move the globe to the top left of the page, the layer above the globe resized accordingly. The name need to go over the far right with a 1-2 offset from the right hand side of the page. The spinning two circles are way cool and I would love to have the opportunity to add a wheelchair there to finish off the design..(check your email for the idea / picture i'm thinking) also the far right is showing a cut off section of a map (can we lose that?)

Middle of the page:
I love the idea of the pictures there as they are represented in grey along wiht the offsetting, verry nice!.. I’m amusing that when a mouse button pass over it they will blow up to what 6x6 photos??. very cool and great touch. I think we only want to show off 3-5 pictures there and I don’t think any of them should be rectangle in shape, lets keep it simple and have it just like it is but only using 5 square boxes for pictures..

Bottom of the page.
The dialog box on the left needs to go, can we put the print in the main page (without layers) and use a scroll function. I’m thinking that once the globe is moved up to the top left we will have gained about 2-4" of word space (if that makes sense??) I feel more text needs to be shown and it should be in the page not on top of it..

I was also thinking that tab box (on the right) can be re centered to the middle right side of the page inlue of against right border..

The footer is COOL… Nice touch!.. can we move the words / phrase to the middle of the page, as for the home tab (house) it not really recognizable can we change it to another house?. The mail box tab is also a nice touch but it should be turned sideways so you can see it’s a mailbox..then can we move them both from the footer and have them in the bottom right side 1” above the footer and about 3-4” below the bottom right of the tab boxe.. hope that makes sense?

Navigating from page to page:
The one thing here is I would like to have the pictures on the main screen change per area ie. Front page with it’s own set of pictures, our product with it’s own set of pictures, etc….

Overall Just fantastic work!.. I’m extremely happy with it and feel that we are defiantly on the rite path / she’s got GREAT vision!.. kudos to the WIFE…


If she needs to please note that she is more than welcome to call me anytime to discuss these comments.. you’ve got my cell number!..

Thank you again Sir.. it will be fricken awesome!... I’ll be very proud of the site!.. and it surly guarantee success for the chair. OUTSTANDING JOB..
Please thank you wife for me!..

Thanks agian Sir

Shaun.

[TDC57]

Originally Posted by FireWire79

no prob, most of the stuff I tried to address in the changes that I sent you earlier. I may have missed the off tires thing. thats funny.

i'll get v2 to you tomorrow some time, as I got to leave for work at 0500.

Not to get in the way of forward progress but i can see v2

Thanks guys.. Thanks for running with it!... I really do appreciate it!..

[TDC57]

Originally Posted by JThiessen

Here is the "about us" edit I did. Shaun, you need to add some stuff about you and your family to it. I recommended you move the info about why people need a chair to your intro page - but its still in the document. Jay - maybe you can upload it??

Thank you!!! one of these days you need to show me how to add attachments.. way cool thou.. I'm printing it out now and will forward back comments soon..

P.S. how's your cold ???

Thanks again Sir...

Shaun.

[JThiessen]

I'd also like to suggest that you have someone with dial up, or an otherwise slow connection pull up the website to see how it loads. Remember your target customer are those that likely do not have DSL.

To do attachments, in the tool(s) area there is an icon that looks like a paperclip. Just click on it, and it will bring up a second page. You can then browse your PC for the document(s). Once you have selected the document, you need to click the upload button. If the file fits the size requirements, then all will be good. Click on close window, then add your comments to the post. Yer done!

I don't know if you got the V1 notes, as I sent them to the link on the wheelchairdesigns web site. I figured I may as well add it as an attachment, that way anyone else can look at it and contribute as well.

Also, I did some work on your letter, see the other post you made. Hope that helps. Please don't take offense to anything that I say. I want your letter to be professional, to the point, and poignant. Charities get letters all the time and yours has to stand out from the rest. It has to grab their attention so that they bring it to the right people's attention.

Remember that many large charitable organizations are multimillion dollar industries. They have all the workings of something like Microsoft, peons, peons' bosses, and the people that actually have some pull. You need to get past these barriers to ensure that your gift is noteworthy.

[jayjay283]

I saw all your stuff and she has to write a paper for college tonight, but she is only working a 1/2 day tomorrow and said she will spend some time on the site tomorrow afternoon. Peace

[jayjay283]

OK My wife is going for v2 this weekend, she got locked up with stuff this week and was too busy to change Shauns site name to the correct one (though I think she did a few changes like that tonight if you want to check the code). Its back to O.G. so he didn't get sued before he got off the ground. She works 40-60 hours a week and does 22 units of online college in the evening LOL.. Well give her another shot this weekend, if you all don't like it after that I apologize. Im not trying to shove her designs down anyones throat (you know what I mean Shaun just saying for others) Just showing you what I could have done for free for y'allz G'z. No hard fellings if it looks like the sugar plum fairy and I need a beating

[JERRY2KONE]

JAYJAY you are a riot. I hope you don't mind me saying so, but you have a sort of slang like I have never seen before in your writing. It is kind of a mix between hiphop, redneck, and da hood. Just about every time I read your posts I end up laghing because you are so funny expressing your thoughts. I bet you are a hoot at a party with your slang and your sense of humor that we see in here nearly every day. Thanks for keeping me laghing. Just another day at RCM. I just love this site.